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PostPosted: Sat May 12, 2018 1:46 pm 
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Finally got some free time and read this story in one sitting, what I like was the characters were very familiar and the story lines were excellent. Now for some negatives, in my humble opinion, could be a little less stilted, meaning sometimes there is a disrupted flow in saying what you want. Also you have the characters overly polite, that being said I can not wait for your next chapter.

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PostPosted: Sun May 13, 2018 6:27 am 
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Thank you so much for taking the time to give me your thoughts - yes I must admit I did probably make the characters a little over polite but was once advised they were a little too confrontational so maybe I’ve gone a bit too far the other way.
I guess I’m trying to make it readable to some of our younger members (and the sisters) but I guess in a fight for survival there would be a bit more tension, this is something I’ll need to address.

As for making it flow better I hope this will improve as I go but guess it comes from not having someone to proof read it for me I’ll try and address this too.

Your feedback is very much appreciated Rick, all the best Ivan


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2018 3:07 pm 
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OK firstly apologies for the long wait to get episode 15 up, in short I have been extremely busy, both with work and my personal life.
Rest assured I am not dead and I am working on several things, I have some drawings complete but will post them at the appropriate time in the story further down the line.
I am working on something for the forum but this will take some time - I think it will be worthwhile when complete but it's taking me away from posting, also I am about to begin some mods for Kurt so please be patient, there just aren't enough hours in the day but I will be back, in the meantime I hope you all enjoy my latest offering - Ivan.


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PostPosted: Sat Sep 01, 2018 7:39 am 
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Hi, Ivan!

Another spectacular read, as usual. Bravo, my friend.

Love, Mia x x x


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PostPosted: Sat Sep 01, 2018 11:37 am 
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Bless you Mia thanks, it’s great to see you back in the saddle please send me a p.m when you can I would like to chat - say hi to Ava and Mitzi xx


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PostPosted: Fri Sep 21, 2018 6:43 am 
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Hi all, just to let you know I will not be posting for a while due to my annual flying exams coming up early next month, got a new aircraft to learn this year so the pressure is on!

I will be back as soon as I can, regards Ivan


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PostPosted: Sat Sep 22, 2018 1:07 am 
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Kurt I accidentally deleted your post sorry, for the benefit of the forum you were asking what airframe I’m doing this time, I currently operate the Boeing 747, 777 and the airbus 380, my new aircraft is the 787 Dreamliner
It’s a pass or fail so if we don’t pass we can’t fly!


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