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PostPosted: Sat May 12, 2018 1:46 pm 
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Finally got some free time and read this story in one sitting, what I like was the characters were very familiar and the story lines were excellent. Now for some negatives, in my humble opinion, could be a little less stilted, meaning sometimes there is a disrupted flow in saying what you want. Also you have the characters overly polite, that being said I can not wait for your next chapter.

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PostPosted: Sun May 13, 2018 6:27 am 
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Thank you so much for taking the time to give me your thoughts - yes I must admit I did probably make the characters a little over polite but was once advised they were a little too confrontational so maybe I’ve gone a bit too far the other way.
I guess I’m trying to make it readable to some of our younger members (and the sisters) but I guess in a fight for survival there would be a bit more tension, this is something I’ll need to address.

As for making it flow better I hope this will improve as I go but guess it comes from not having someone to proof read it for me I’ll try and address this too.

Your feedback is very much appreciated Rick, all the best Ivan


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2018 3:07 pm 
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OK firstly apologies for the long wait to get episode 15 up, in short I have been extremely busy, both with work and my personal life.
Rest assured I am not dead and I am working on several things, I have some drawings complete but will post them at the appropriate time in the story further down the line.
I am working on something for the forum but this will take some time - I think it will be worthwhile when complete but it's taking me away from posting, also I am about to begin some mods for Kurt so please be patient, there just aren't enough hours in the day but I will be back, in the meantime I hope you all enjoy my latest offering - Ivan.


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PostPosted: Sat Sep 01, 2018 7:39 am 
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Hi, Ivan!

Another spectacular read, as usual. Bravo, my friend.

Love, Mia x x x


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PostPosted: Sat Sep 01, 2018 11:37 am 
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Bless you Mia thanks, it’s great to see you back in the saddle please send me a p.m when you can I would like to chat - say hi to Ava and Mitzi xx


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PostPosted: Fri Sep 21, 2018 6:43 am 
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Hi all, just to let you know I will not be posting for a while due to my annual flying exams coming up early next month, got a new aircraft to learn this year so the pressure is on!

I will be back as soon as I can, regards Ivan


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PostPosted: Sat Sep 22, 2018 1:07 am 
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Kurt I accidentally deleted your post sorry, for the benefit of the forum you were asking what airframe I’m doing this time, I currently operate the Boeing 747, 777 and the airbus 380, my new aircraft is the 787 Dreamliner
It’s a pass or fail so if we don’t pass we can’t fly!


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PostPosted: Mon Oct 15, 2018 3:01 pm 
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Hi all, sorry for the extremely long wait for part two of 'Day of the Dark Stars' but I have had a very stressful time. I have had to take time away for my annual exams and to be honest have not been in the right frame of mind to write, two of my work colleagues have passed, one due to a car crash and the other due to a heart attack, this coupled with dear Mia's health problems has had an effect on me.

On a lighter note I am so happy to hear she is on the mend and let's all hope she is back in the saddle real soon posting her great story.

Don't worry about me folks I am good to go, all is well with me now but please if you get a moment, please send your love and best wishes to Mia if you haven't already.

I will post some drawings to accompany my latest episode soon, all the best Ivan.


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PostPosted: Tue Nov 06, 2018 4:29 pm 
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Hi all, well as promised I’m back!

Despite yet another tragedy I am determined not to let all this bereavement get me down, just reminds me how precious life is, thank god our dear Mia is on the road to recovery.

With regards to my latest post- sorry for the rudimentary lift off drawings of my new fighter/bomber but I just wanted you all to get the feel of what I envisaged it’s lift off to look like.

I am at a crossroads with “Pilgrimage to Earth” many threats have been eliminated thanks to the victory of the battle of Terra Major, that said many problems within the military have surfaced, expect more intrigue in the forthcoming episodes as things come to a head!!

Thanks for your continued support, ivanho


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PostPosted: Sat Nov 24, 2018 8:23 pm 
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Thanks for your patience all, taking my time with this next post as it’s critical to the plot moving forward, a lot going on in my real life but I am working on a few drawings and plot lines so bear with me, I don’t want to frack it up, Ivanho - p.s thanks for staying with me Kasero


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PostPosted: Sun Nov 25, 2018 5:18 am 
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Like I wrote in an other post, take your time Ivan. There is not much writers on the forum, but the stories are of high quality.


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PostPosted: Sun Nov 25, 2018 6:53 am 
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That’s very kind thanks - let’s pray Mia is back posting soon and thanks to kurt for posting her latest chapters and keeping Lady H going


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PostPosted: Fri Dec 07, 2018 11:08 am 
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Finally, it took me ages to get this one finished, there just aren't enough hours in a day for me!
Apologies for the long wait, I hope I have set the tone right, I had a few doubts about this episode. I have tried to take on board previous comments about the protagonists being too polite and stir the pot a little.

I would like a bit of feedback on this one as I'm not sure if I have got it right?

That's it till after Christmas from me as I haven't done any shopping or wrote any cards, or put the bloody tree up yet!!
Off to work for a few day's so it will have to wait now.

Let me be the first to wish all members and watchers a very happy Christmas wherever you will be xx


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